But let's examine the hypothesis that Alter is "a master at the English language". Start with the first two verses of his translation:
“When God began to create heaven and earth, and the earth then was welter and waste and darkness over the deep and God’s breath hovering over the waters, God said, ‘Let there be light’. And there was light.”
That's as much as I can find online, but that is enough to prove my point.
"The earth then was welter"? What on earth does that mean? It may sound nice and poetic with its alliteration with "waste", but as far as I am concerned it is nonsense, a bit like Jabberwocky.
God’s breath hovering over the waters"
grammatical error which would be marked wrong in first grade.
suppose the point could be that "the earth then was... God's breath...", but this is both bad punctuation and a translation error.) This is no more and no less than bad English, and would be marked as such by any teacher. I suppose there is a fashion in certain literary circles for writers to ignore the basic rules of English and still be considered "literary", but I don't judge English by those people's standards.
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